about 1 minute of lyrics, pls give feedback, constructive criticism, the things you like and the things you hate. Just trying to improve

I'm going to completely ignore the mix since I know you don't do any mixing, and will only comment on the writing, vocals and a bit of the arrangement. As far as the writing, a strong point of this song is the hook. Its simplicity makes it catchy and memorable. Also, you're making good use of multi-syllable rhymes. Your vocals have continued to improve and I'd strongly encourage you to keep working on them. When it comes to the arrangement, all of the vocals were centered. If you pan your adlibs and vocal doubles give or take 30% off to the left and right, it makes for a fuller and wider sound.

Thats a great suggestion with the panning of the adlibs, I’m going to rework the song as a whole and try to re deliver the verse since I feel it wasn’t at the energy level I wanted It to be. Mixing is a whole other world I havent even begun to learn yet, but I really want to learn how to properly engineer and record vocals first before I start doing that. Once I have some real artistry going like music videos, an actual rapper name or alias and s***, there’s no reason why I shouldnt be putting properly mixed music out. Quickly finding out that there’s a learning curve to all this lol. Thanks for all your tips though, I’m def a much stronger writer and rapper than engineer but I feel like once it all really starts to come together I’ll hit my stride

Yeah this hard! I really like the vibe of the track. Obviously the vocals could use mixing but you know that! This turned out real nice! 👏🏾