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made this last year and it made my moms cry with the outro. you gotta listen all the way though
this might be some s***
Even if you skip to the outro but i suggest letting it build and hearing the whole thing

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Just means you’re mom is not afraid to express her emotions. In 2021 that’s an achievement within itself. Your mom should be proud

burner

Elaborate please

Pretty okay. I like the melody its catchy. I didnt cry but im not your mum

Light 6/ possible 7

Traaaan… SITION

Drake Type Beat has entered the chat

I have depression

not really

How 'bout have my heart hurtin'?
Hold it all inside, that could make you die early

shoutout melon
im just super proud of that outro

I’m not gonna talk about the production bc I think you know what could be improved

But the whole song is basically a Freestyle.
Your mom cried and you may be proud of the outro but why would I, or anyone that doesn’t know you, cry to this song or “be proud” (be impressed) by the outro? (I will say the outro does sound kinda cool as a bunch of sounds but I can’t make out any of the vocals)

I don’t ask those questions to be an a****** but to make you brainstorm about how you could make the song better, lyrically & stylistically

For example, the first 2-4 bars mention the word “you”, but there is no context explaining or implying who the “you” is that you are talking about. The only thing I can think of is maybe you are speaking from the present tense “I” to the past tense “old you” when you say “you”, but if so it’s not made abundantly clear that that’s what’s going on
At the end of verse, you start saying “you” again , and end the verse with “but girl...”
Which makes me think maybe this verse is about a girl and not the old you but like I said
It’s not clear

This is just 1 thing and there’s a lot more
But this very loosely a “song”

Just listened, really like that sample man, like that's golden, beat's very chill and feels good to replay in my head, doesn't just go in one ear and out the other

The lyrics weren't bad but as far as criticism goes I think you could go harder in your delivery, not necessarily more energetic, I get that you wanted a more chill atmosphere, but whatever vibe you want to put across with your vocals, REALLY lean into it, like even when an artist like Earl is sounding bored and detached on a track, he's really overplaying it so the feeling is communicated, here at points it sounded like you were underplaying it a bit

That outro really was gorgeous man, I said before but that high-pitched vocal sample is stunning, cuts through the mix in a way that gives a lot of character to the track

Heartless

In context of the original concept album “the breakup album”it makes sense, this is towards the end when I’m getting over it and speaking how I felt on the whole relationship. This is like the climax content wise.
“Stages that you can’t walk” is me being in meetings/shows that she can’t be on

“I took her out the ville(local somewhat ghetto I’m sure most would understand)
Brought her to a better place
Showed her how it feels
To live right off of them(labels)
Thinking it’s all I do
You know it’s so true
You got new status but it’s still the old you”
Then I proceed to be a hypocrite on the verses but by the end I’m fed up and move on thus the uplifting free melody

Not dismissing your criticism at all and took into account
My main point is this is an album cut

Hope it was a good youngboy song
Bless

Thank you bro, and I agree on the bass in my vocals, it could be a mixing issue tbh because that was like my 4th take off those verses

I did that “sample” myself, admittedly my plug blessed me with a tiny bit of booger sugar and I sniffed it right before I started the outro lmao it worked to get that high pitch

Verses are similar to Push runaway verse content wise